Playing Away Poem by Ruth Walters

Playing Away

Rating: 5.0

If you were to strip the canvass away,
scrape the surface a little,
you may see a different picture.
Errant parents, drinking, gambling,
indulging in debauchery,
no time for kids.
.
Dark, grim houses line
the depressing camber of the hill
in varying shades of grey.
Cloying smoke pours
from hideous chimneys.
Maybe that's all there is to do?
.
Two walls, oppose each other,
Names are inscribed in
sprinkles of colour, blues and pinks,
emphasising the dullness of the bricks.
Children are at play
and parents are playing away.
.
Strewn around are make shift racing carts,
wheels, separated, in odd positions,
dustbins, lidless, school caps, odd coats,
hang from telephone lines.
You can almost smell the poverty,
and unyielding rows of two ups, two downs.
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Each lofty abode looks ghostly,
but the children are carefree.
They busy themselves with frolics.
bringing the canvass to life in flecks of colour,
contrasting the unforgiving truth
daubed by the artist's gifted hand.
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COMMENTS OF THE POEM
Bri Edwards 12 September 2024

Ruth, I strongly feel that this is one (one of VERY few) of your usually very fine poems which needs some changing (quite a bit) . Now I'll read another one. ;) bri

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Bri Edwards 12 September 2024

And NEITHER definition which I found online for 'errant' sounded 'right' to me. I believe you mean just plain 'BAD parents', for what it's worth. : (

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Bri Edwards 12 September 2024

(cont.) 'Canvas' is most commonly used as a noun and refers to a specific type of strong cloth used for sails, tents, and as a surface for painting.'

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Bri Edwards 12 September 2024

re 'canvass': ''Canvass' is most commonly used as a verb to refer to soliciting votes for an election. It can also sometimes be used as a noun to refer to a canvassing operation. (cont.)

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James McLain 03 September 2024

It's been a while dear Ruth, the poetry is simply great and I thank you.

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