Nika McGuin

Silver Star - 3,158 Points (12/01/89 - present / Louisiana)

Ready & Waiting - Poem by Nika McGuin

The banquet had ended about 30 minutes ago
when she turned to me and said,
'you ready to go? '
& I answered, 'yes.'

But we stay & we stay
my mood: gray - bored in every way
as I look on, watching her
talking the night away

Topic(s) of this poem: boredom


Comments about Ready & Waiting by Nika McGuin

  • Daniel Brick (3/21/2015 7:39:00 PM)


    This is an unusual poem. The two quatrains balance each other in terms of structure, but the tones are very different. Them first one - objective, explanatory; the second one revealing a rift between friends, and a slow-burn in the narrator. It hides genuine anger. That last passage - WATCHING HER TAKE THE NIGHT AWAY - is so filled with resentment, which isn't stated but felt acutely. You don't identify the relationship between the parties, but the two of them are heading for a confrontation. The building resentment really got to me! (Report) Reply

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  • Kelly Kurt (3/18/2015 8:34:00 PM)


    Sweet. Selfless acts are beauty. Nice poem. Thanks for sharing. (Report) Reply

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Poem Submitted: Wednesday, March 18, 2015



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