Realmbrations Poem by john tiong chunghoo
Realmbrations
realmbrations -
every realm vibrates
to its own
i have yet to evolve
to view them all
okay, to view only
for if my physique vibrates
to the same rhythm
to even one other realm
it would cause crashes
realmnilation
the mockingbird
when it sucks paradise
from the blooms,
you see two realms
one clouded by the vibrations of its wings
but if you could go fast enough
you could jump
between its up and down
the realms survive
at the edge of each other
the dead acquires another vibration,
goes to live with their like
if we fail to evolve
to see these realms
we could invent something
realmseescope
to detect all the realms between us,
tuning to them
the way we manoevre the
volume of radios
or may be invent a secret weapon
to get them to vibrate to a similar rhythm
and cause a realmnilation
or may be not, for every realm
might be installed with an auto protect system
each realm acquires another rhythm
once it detects danger looming
the way moths and frogs change colours
to keep to their own realm
John, Very inventive. Did you know its said that Leonardo Davinci drew the position of bird wings in flight that should be impossible for humans to perceive? His drawings were confirmed to be correct when freeze frame photography was invented and directed toward the flight of birds. He must have mastered the art of syncrealmnicity? ! Suggestions: - put a period after 'to its own'. - use punctuation correctly throughout. Readers lose connection with your thoughts when they are trying to figure out where the breaks are. If you really must do without punctuation, take it all out and use line breaks for commas and double line breaks for periods. You are still punctuating, just not using the little symbols that some think are confining. Personally, I believe order brings greater freedom which is one of those paradoxes of the universe. - make 'may be' one word - 'maybe' unless you did it for some intention. - inser the article 'a' here: 'we could invent a realmseescope' Kudos: the verse about the mockingbird is the best because it shows rather than tells. Thanks for sharing your unique perceptions. albi
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taken from sciku group: Hi john w here Just wanted to say that I really like Realmbrations. I showed it to a few fellow poets here in the Republic of Ireland (none of them remotely interested in science fiction poetry) and they all agreed that this piece would be at home in any poetry journal anywhere. best regards john w