Revisions Poem by warner treuter

Revisions

Rating: 5.0


Revisions are what poetry is all about.
Double-digit revisions show you care.
I remember writing a poem about a man
Who lived in a weird area where
Many of the deer seemed to have a nick in their ear.
After 30 years of trying, our hunter always returned
Without his deer - except
One day he drove home through town
With his kill, a good sized buck
Strapped to the hood of his car.
A solid head shot. He explained to everyone
That now that he had got his deer
He could quit hunting; besides, he said,
My eyes is gettin' too bad to aim, anyways.

I like to write poems like that, but they do take
Some revisin'.

Sunday, August 23, 2009
Topic(s) of this poem: car,hunting
COMMENTS OF THE POEM
Varanasi Ramabrahmam 24 August 2009

Revision helps the youthful outburst of feelings mature and poise and equanimity adorns the verse. Liked the poem much.

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Marvin Brato 23 August 2009

Poems are written by instinct, yet better ideas come up to make it better if not best through revision! profound thought, sir!

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