the physical body
gets bored of itself
eventually gives up itself
though this soul is very much
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notable address of tough subject matter. short stanzas seem well suited to this piece. especially fond of the direct metaphoric revelation, Mr. Chunghoo. -Tailor
John, I really like the second stanza but the first one seems to be too blatant. I think you could work on making it a little more obscure...and...well, poetic. :) Raynette
I love this poem. It has a lot of truth hidden inside not always visible to just anyone who is lucky enough to read it!