Chitresh Jhawar

She Killed Me

The day when she accepted my love
we both were two happy doves
as we used to understand each others' feelings;
talking, sleeping, muttering and loving.

I always said, 'i love thee'
but i never understood why she killed me.
She shot the bullet straight to my heart
She planned it further, she had the chart.

I was a celibate, I never asked you to change it
I ask you for the reason, was it because I was an addict
to you i was truthful, i never hid anything
I was exulted of our love and was prepared to sing

the song of love to propose you
to tell, 'i love u marry me, will it be true? '
Fidelity was all through my veins
i was just about to say, but it rained.

I thought God is with me setting the situation
but I was unaware that it was my termination
I did not speak a word to her and we began to move
hand in hand with everything approved.

We walked and walked and walked alone
before it could flub, I wanted to say it all.
The rain stopped, again I thought
'god left me, now I must trot.'

I kneeled down and she seemed surprised
I took out my ancestral ring and looked her in the eye
I don't know how I said it, but it was true
'Darling, marry me...will you? '

She took the ring; laughed; ran away
but she did not wear it, anyway
I was delighted, delirious, doolally, she was my doxy
I ran behind her, softly took her hand in mine and called for a taxi

We reached my duplex, my hand was still holding her hand
I took her in my arms 'sorry if I'm mistaken; I'm untrained.'
We went inside, I was curious what she will do next
inside the room, she asked me to sit beside the chest

She looked at me and I looked at her
And we just sat like that there for an hour
She kissed me goodnight and whispered those three words
I took her home safely and returned.


That night I coulnd't even fall asleep
fantasizing; I've fallen in love to the very deep
I was dreaming of her, and our future
but soon the game was changed completely by nature.

The sun rose, but I couldn't control
I ran towards her home, passing every hurdle and hole
I was curious to know about her
but I'm evasive to this what I saw there.

I saw her on another man's lap, under a tree
she was saying things to him, she never said to me
I saw her finger with a new wedding ring
one tear rolled down my cheeks and it fell on my ancestral ring

I bent and took my ring, looked at it continuously
but in anger I threw it at her head drastically
They looked on my crying face
but I didn't want to disturb them, so i begin to leave that phase

I was going away, my face down and hands still
then came the noise of a bullet, it was on me, i was killed
they were roistering, and i was falling down with blood
and then i turned and died watching her happy face which was a little disturbed.

Poem Submitted: Monday, October 19, 2009
Poem Edited: Sunday, September 30, 2012

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Comments about She Killed Me by Chitresh Jhawar

  • Maria Rose Dominic (7/14/2011 11:01:00 AM)

    All ur poems make me want 2 smile n cry at the same tym. Obviously u r very talented.. i lyk ur works- keep sharing
    hope u r not a sad person.. do fidn smthng cheerful n write ok?

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  • Dwi UtamiDwi Utami (8/6/2010 9:12:00 AM)

    Wew..good write of you.
    BUT she killed you?
    You love she and you also will marry with she..i'thought she cannot kill you.but certainly she love and wanted marry with you: p: p: p+10 congrats great.

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  • Andy Brown (6/3/2010 5:29:00 AM)

    It had a nice flow and yes I will read it again- thanks for sharing.

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  • Deepthi Vincent (5/18/2010 1:59:00 PM)

    This one really touched my heart...
    Good work Chitresh: -)

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  • Kieran J96 (5/18/2010 12:35:00 PM)

    great poem, carry on writing!

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  • Kyra Skal (5/15/2010 7:08:00 AM)

    A poem like this is uncommon in males and so I'll tell you this; you're a deep and real man. This poem is great. One thing I will add is that you should probably use proper spelling; 'you' not 'u'.

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  • Theresa Walker (5/10/2010 11:54:00 AM)

    good poem keep up the good work

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  • Theresa Walker (5/10/2010 11:53:00 AM)

    very good keep up the good work

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  • Broken Heart (5/9/2010 1:35:00 PM)

    Nice and deep poem! Keep on writting :)

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  • Pradyumna Jyotir (5/5/2010 2:59:00 AM)

    This one is best of all i have read so far.....u are improving ;))

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  • The Devil From Hell (4/7/2010 1:00:00 PM)

    Dude it sounds like someone ripped your heart out and shoved your face in the mud on a rainy day. Then ate your heart. Harsh. but I love it! ♥

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  • Lady KrimZen (12/29/2009 5:53:00 AM)

    This is an example of my favourite Romance Genre: Cheap and Tawdry Romance.
    Brilliant genre to write in.

    I see this poem as a Narrative Poem; which is why, I think, this could be a great poem for Verses (or parts) .

    Could have done with some similes in this poem. Would have help bring out a stronger image and created a more poetic sense. Usually, similes (if used correctly) are a key element in Romance Poetry. Otherwise, it sounds quite sloppy and overdone. But that is my opinion; I hate the Romance Genre (excluding Cheap and Tawdry Romance) .

    Stanza 1 through to 14, can be classified as Mature Romance (or in some cases, Teen Romance) , whilst Stanzas 15 to 17 is classified as Cheap and Tawdry Romance.


    In my honest opinion, I really did not like this poem.
    Lacks a lot of emotion; until we reach the last stanza. That is when we finally feel and sense some real emotion.
    I think, you have tried to 'tell' us the story; instead of 'showing' us the story. Hence the lack of emotion. You can improve this poem by including a lot more figurative and emotive language. That will start you off in the editing process.

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  • Tricia Dildine (12/24/2009 8:58:00 AM)

    yep this pretty much is a masterpiece! great job

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  • Apurva Jain (12/23/2009 8:21:00 AM)

    this poem is actually a master piece.............
    really herst touching!

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  • Rahul Aithal (12/18/2009 8:34:00 PM)

    i saw her on anothers man's lap, under a tree
    she was saying things to him, she never said to me
    i saw her finger with a new wedding ring
    1 tear rolled down my cheeks and it faled on my ancestoral ring

    Very nice!

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  • Tiffanie Stanishia (12/14/2009 9:10:00 PM)

    i really like the way you expressed yourself in this one. keep up the good work! you have great talent.

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  • she wolf howls searching for her mate aka ashley (12/7/2009 11:06:00 AM)

    theres not much i can say on this one other than im sorry u felt that way

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  • Leslie Alexis (heaven Is My Home) (11/26/2009 11:54:00 AM)

    sad but good.. with control you be great.

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  • The Lost.. (11/25/2009 12:20:00 PM)

    Oh...one of thesad poems..but realy too hard to have this end: (...very sad for you, but hope you the best with another oone: D

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  • Brenda Arroyo (11/5/2009 2:25:00 PM)

    Such a sad end: /
    Great job writing it, though

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