Sometimes Poem by Michael Budwah

Sometimes

Rating: 3.8


Sometimes it doesn't take much to know a person well, sometimes it takes a lot to see what's under their skin and feelings, being alone sucks and most times I feel stuck, like life without a purpose, I'm wondering what's mine, to be alone forever and die, or be with you and survive, I'm always down but yet I thrive and try being as positive as possible,
It's not impossible but I know it's hard at times, like my father told me it's always going to be hard times, so I keep my faith in Buddha cause he's what keeps me alive, and the thoughts of finding true love without being cheated on, we know the feeling and it isn't great, we hide our true and deep feelings because the pain, like when it rains, at times I feel like nothing can drain the pain I feel, the emotions I keep bottled up in a safe, unbreakable unless I let you in, to be one with you like the universe would sooth my heart, mind and soul, but I can't do much to make you mine and I don't have a lot of time, the person I am and things I've done in the name of love, left me with nothing but a rug, like the evil thoughts and good are fighting in my head like tug of war, a never ending battle just looking for love, and not always in wrong places, we've both been thought hell, in and out of it, make the madness and sadness stop, I know I'm a man but yet still can only take so much hardship, a partnership is what I seek, help each other and build up like a team, sometimes I'm scared of what life might bring, dark dim days or sun shine of rays, I could die today and not accomplish what I started yesterday, leaving behind nothing but my name and bones in a natural grave.

COMMENTS OF THE POEM
Jefferson Carter 21 June 2017

Michael, if this is a poem, you might lineate it like one. Line breaks could give it a little more expressiveness. Also, you use too many abstract words (pain, madness, sadness) , as if simply telling the reader will make him feel what you feel. You should read LOTS of good contemporary poetry (Mary Oliver, C.K. Williams) if you want to improve. If you have time, check out my new website: jeffersoncarterverse.com Tell me how you like it. Yrs, JC

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Erica Mountain 21 June 2017

A good poem. I enjoyed it.

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