Once, on a bright sunny day,
A lady walked into my store.
Oh yes, my store of crystals and mirrors.
A lady well dressed,
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dear lakshmi, you should read slyvia plath's mirror and see how she tackle the same theme. yours is good too except you try to explain what everybody already knew. i commit the same mistakes too. write more and read more and you will soon be able to get rid of the cliche. sincerely, john.
good one lakshmi...theres a slight prose style...yet its a good one.