The Attempted Escape Poem by Patrick Villareal

The Attempted Escape

Rating: 5.0


Bolting towards the open feilds trying to elude its grasp
Running wildly past the trees attempting to resist its painful clasp
Hoping it wont capture me as I race through the night
Carelessly leaving a trail; keeping me in its line of sight
Glancing back; seeing it is still on my tail
Realizing that it would take my mind and eventually prevail
Exhausted and now staggering, I cannot run anymore
Losing my will to resist, quickly hitting the dirt floor
My mind is now invaded and my thoughts now forgone
Being dragged back with it, failing to have pressed on

COMMENTS OF THE POEM
Romeo Della Valle 27 October 2011

Wow! What a great and well crafted write that clearly shows your potential to make to the top of the Poetry World! Trying desperately to escape from a difficult situation is not easy but it can be done. I love the rich imagery and fine wording in this write! I can identify with this write because many times I feel like that and you can see it in my recent posted poem titled: A Dare Mind Escape! This write deserves a 10+++ Keep giving the World more of your talented works! God Bless You! Love and Peace for always! Romeo from New York City! ...

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Marcus Mckinley 18 October 2011

it is hard for one to escape one's self. nice write

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