I bear the burden of your love.
It is a debt I won't repay.
It weighs me down, I bend, I hunch.
How can I make you go away?
You ask for nothing in return.
You give and never keep the score,
While I - a miser - cannot spare
A smile, a word of loads I store.
The sense of guilt erodes my soul.
If I could cure you of me!
I may be wrong, I might repent.
Still, let us set each other free.
Julia, certainly a poem true to life... the burden of unrequited love. It weighs heavily... good poem! Brian
A little masterpiece! So well focused and the words so apt and well chosen. I love 'It weighs me down, I bend, I hunch'. Well done.
Dear Julia or Jewel, Yes, a one way relationship is unhealthy for everyone involved. This is a well-crafted poem that clearly shows the one side of the object of affection who doesn't return the feelings. A solid and expressive poem. Good writing! Kindly, Hugh
Overwhelming emotion. That's what I see in this, Jewel. The speaker's apparent selfishness and heartlessness ('a debt I won't repay', 'how can I make you go away', 'a miser') only reinforce her urgent need for escape from this relationship. Jewel, in keeping with the nickname that I use on you, your poem is no less than a sparkling gem. Saluting you with warm regards and a score of 10, Gina.
This poem has not been translated into any other language yet.
I would like to translate this poem
Julia, an eloquently captured portrayal of unrequited love, like the way you have chosen to tell it from the perspective of the one who cannot reciprocate. Wonderful use of language that gives this poem a certain edge. Warmest wishes, Justine