Joyce Chelmo


The Dark Horse - Poem by Joyce Chelmo

Forever drawn to the Dark Horses.
So much passion; danger,
ardor and complexity.
Likened to standing
on the edge of a waterfall.

Shining muscle and sinew,
too beautiful to keep,
too dangerous to hold.
They stand out among
the rest.

Living hard and fast,
the spirit of fire
in their eyes.

We want to tame them,
but we never will.
Perhaps therein lies
the attraction.


Comments about The Dark Horse by Joyce Chelmo

  • (5/20/2006 2:33:00 AM)


    Greg no I don't mind if someone corrects my grammer at all. I get a little testy
    when someone rewrites me by asking me to remove something though. My weakness is grammer and punctuation.

    Thank you

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  • (5/20/2006 1:00:00 AM)


    Joyce, I feel because you shift to the plural they in the 2nd stanza, that perhaps you should pluralise Horses in the 1st line. Also, line 4 should read Likened or you could maybe change to Akin to be grammatically correct. Hope I'm not being overly critical, but believe these changes would enhance the poem. (Report) Reply

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Poem Submitted: Wednesday, May 3, 2006

Poem Edited: Saturday, May 20, 2006


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