The Deep Whispers Poem by Neethu Prasanna

The Deep Whispers

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They in a rhythm cling and see,
Thousand times the shore and the sea;

They wait only for a small wee
Then again they touch in glee;

With throats of tales come and meet
In their ways they smile and greet;

With thoughts of talks go and leave
In some time they come and cleave;

To the calm shore sea does whine,
“You are losing your flesh in sand mine;

See the turtle eggs have cracked
And the pretty corals too wracked;

When I fear or tire I always come to rest-
On you, the vast and soothing chest!

No more I can see you in this injury,
Let me with my waves try to bury;

If you wane like this shedding blood,
Who will stop, in fury when I flood? ”

Saying this with a heavy heart it goes
And dances hard to forget the woes;

Again in the rhythm they cling and see,
How many more, the shore and the sea? ...

COMMENTS OF THE POEM
Sunil Ramu 15 September 2013

I think the thing that is most impressive to me, is that you seem to be the only writer I have encountered here who understands poetry. What it is and can be. I read the first 5 poems. I'm often criticised by others because they believe, that I believe, poetry must be written the way I do. That, of course, has never been true.I appreciate the way you demonstrate how poetry can be written. This will not be my last visit. I hope to read at the appropriate times. You deserve a top ten position. I hope you remain there, and I will do my part in that. Such quality must be rewarded, or it will be replaced by something less substantial. To the untrained eye, they are all the same. Have a nice day!

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Sunil Ramu 15 September 2013

I think the thing that is most impressive to me, is that you seem to be the only writer I have encountered here who understands poetry. What it is and can be. I read the first 5 poems. I'm often criticised by others because they believe, that I believe, poetry must be written the way I do. That, of course, has never been true.I appreciate the way you demonstrate how poetry can be written. This will not be my last visit. I hope to read at the appropriate times. You deserve a top ten position. I hope you remain there, and I will do my part in that. Such quality must be rewarded, or it will be replaced by something less substantial. I won't request a visit from you. Nor will I suggest a poem. Have a nice day!

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Valsa George 19 April 2013

Exquisitely beautiful! ! The sea and shore in eternal embrace! This highly rhyming poem brings waves of joy one after another in unbroken succession ! !

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Kavya . 04 April 2013

wow u have really written this very beautifully, the rhythm of the sea, the calm shore, the broken turtle eggs, v nice...thoroughly enjoyed it!

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Vivek Tiwari 19 March 2013

Very nice. Well reached the message of Nature her whispers. Loved the poem.

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Patricia Grantham 13 October 2013

Natures whispers are beautiful to see and experience. When sand and wind and water mixes this creates a wonderful scenery which can't be imitated by man. very inspiring.

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Sunil Ramu 15 September 2013

I think the thing that is most impressive to me, is that you seem to be the only writer I have encountered here who understands poetry. What it is and can be. I read the first 5 poems. I'm often criticised by others because they believe, that I believe, poetry must be written the way I do. That, of course, has never been true.I appreciate the way you demonstrate how poetry can be written. This will not be my last visit. I hope to read at the appropriate times. You deserve a top ten position. I hope you remain there, and I will do my part in that. Such quality must be rewarded, or it will be replaced by something less substantial. To the untrained eye, they are all the same. Have a nice day!

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Sunil Ramu 15 September 2013

I think the thing that is most impressive to me, is that you seem to be the only writer I have encountered here who understands poetry. What it is and can be. I read the first 5 poems. I'm often criticised by others because they believe, that I believe, poetry must be written the way I do. That, of course, has never been true.I appreciate the way you demonstrate how poetry can be written. This will not be my last visit. I hope to read at the appropriate times. You deserve a top ten position. I hope you remain there, and I will do my part in that. Such quality must be rewarded, or it will be replaced by something less substantial. To the untrained eye, they are all the same. Have a nice day!

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Sunil Ramu 15 September 2013

I think the thing that is most impressive to me, is that you seem to be the only writer I have encountered here who understands poetry. What it is and can be. I read the first 5 poems. I'm often criticesed by others because they believe, that I believe, poetry must be written the way you do. I appreciate the way you demonstrate how poetry can be written. This will not be my last visit, I am sure. I hope to read at the appropriate times. You deserve a top ten position. Have a nice day Neethu and keep writing....

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Sunil Ramu 15 September 2013

I think the thing that is most impressive to me, is that you seem to be the only writer I have encountered here who understands poetry. What it is and can be. I read the first 5 poems. I'm often criticised by others because they believe, that I believe, poetry must be written the way I do. That, of course, has never been true.I appreciate the way you demonstrate how poetry can be written. This will not be my last visit. I hope to read at the appropriate times. You deserve a top ten position. I hope you remain there, and I will do my part in that. Such quality must be rewarded, or it will be replaced by something less substantial. To the untrained eye, they are all the same. Have a nice day!

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