Edmund V. Strolis

The Long Drive - Poem by Edmund V. Strolis

Alone within the stars on that long drive home.
Not a creature crossed my path not a leaf stirred.
Time and space were lost to the shadowy mind.
Swallowed by the universe a lunar landscape bare.

Stranger in a strange land with infinity for fuel.
Dark walls of corn and pines lost in darkest night.
Too aware of this monster star laced infinity.
A nameless planet lost in space a rocky satellite.

Stripped of the conscious barrier that sheltered me.
A nameless being exposed to indifferent eternity.
I knew then and there in a cold raw unfiltered truth.
That the night had grown too dark to see you anymore.

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  • Pamela Sinicrope (11/11/2015 8:10:00 AM)

    I needed to read this poem several times before I could develop a feeling for the meaning. There is allot going on in this! The figurative language, the references and the metaphors are complex...and the mood is downright sad or wistful or quiet. I'm not sure. It leaves me unsettled, but I think this is the intention of the writer. One one level, I imagine someone driving home in the dark, perhaps away from a lover...permanently...that relationship is over. The driver is contemplating their feelings as they drive, the loss takes away their ability to see the world anymore, their mind is lost in the loss. On another level, I imagine, someone who has passed away (alone WITHIN the stars) and lost their worldly possessions, their human body. A stranger in a strange land with infinity for fuel can have dual meaning. The line, stripped of the conscious barrier that sheltered me/A nameless being exposed to indifferent eternity literally describes an energy or soul that has left the body, but could also reference how one might feel when they lost a person they love who anchors them and gives them meaning. The first and third stanzas are the ones that give us the ethereal feel of the poem, while the second stanza, plants us still on the earth with the lines about corn and pine trees that exist, but that the driver can not see because he/she can only see the monster star laced infinity. This conflict in the poem makes it more interesting than a simple piece about infinity or one just about loss...it keeps the reader thinking. Well written! I enjoyed this one! (Report) Reply

    Edmund Strolis (11/11/2015 8:23:00 AM)

    You are right on so many levels that I must admit that I am heartened to think that the feeling or impression was not lost. Yes sad and raw, exposed. The poem is based on a real experience wherein driving at that hour through a countryside laid bare I was overwhelmed at the immensity of the universe and my tiny vehicle so far away from the path of another that it seemed the distance between two people may just as well have been a distance as remote as the galaxy. The nameless planet and people on it revealed for what it is without the trappings and distractions of our daily culture and makeup of things that we cling to for security. The darkness, the universe, the distance, the mortality and helplessness to affect change in another person's life a light year away. In this case it was not a lover but a person that I sensed all too well and all too late that they were lost and about to be swallowed up by an indifferent universe and I was unable to make a difference.

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  • Kumarmani Mahakul (11/10/2015 1:47:00 AM)

    Stranger in a strange land with infinity for fuel....Very amazing drafting shared with wise sense. Interesting.10 (Report) Reply

  • Shakil Ahmed (11/10/2015 1:25:00 AM)

    'Stranger in a strange land with infinity for fuel.
    Dark walls of corn and pines lost in darkest night'

    Beautiful lines, i enjoyed reading the poem, thanks for sharing
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Poem Submitted: Tuesday, November 10, 2015

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