Jr. Cuyam

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To Be More Than Just Friends - Poem by Jr. Cuyam

I've been fortunate to have a friend like you
I can never repay all the things you do
For your generosity, kindness and love
Buds, I can never ever thank you enough

Such a person like you is a golden treasure
My heart, you stole, and you make me feel like a fool
Honestly, to be with you forever is my desire
How God is using you to make me whole

All I have is a pen and an empty paper
If I reveal my secrets, could we be together?
But I'm afraid I will end up with teary eyes
So better to remain silent, fall on my knees, and think twice

Unfortunately, you are already taken
For us to become more than just friends would be impossible
I smile, I cry and I sigh, but I'm still hopin'
Praying for an open door, a chance, an opportunity,
Some sort of a thing which might come along my way.

Topic(s) of this poem: confessional, desire


Comments about To Be More Than Just Friends by Jr. Cuyam

  • Aqua Flower (9/30/2015 9:03:00 PM)


    I love the respect you have. Like Daniel Brick expressed in his comments, I think you expressed your feelings eloquently in this piece. Great write! (Report) Reply

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  • Martina Moriarty Mc Carthy (9/28/2015 1:26:00 PM)


    Lovely poem enjoyed reading xxx Martina (Report) Reply

  • Grace Galeon (9/10/2015 12:13:00 PM)


    Buuuuuuuds :) (Report) Reply

  • Roop Rekha Bhaskar (9/10/2015 11:11:00 AM)


    A friend is some one who is always share everything and no matter you are, with all the mistakes he/she accepts you. Nice poem for a friend and i hope this message got thru to the person it was written for. (if it was for someone) thank you - Good one. (Report) Reply

  • Daniel Brick (9/9/2015 11:34:00 AM)


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    Jr. Cuyam, you asked me read a poem I DESIRE YOU which does not appear, but this title TO BE MORE THAN FRIENDS seems to be the right poem. I prefer this title because it expresses your dilemma precisely. You write in a 4-line stanza - quatrains - and fill each one with sufficient detail to move the narrative forward. There are occasional rhymes - I didn't see a consistent rhyme scheme - which I think work well in a poem of emotions. This strikes me as a narrative rather than lyric poem, because you treat the subject as a series of events unfolding over time with obvious emphasis first on your desire and second on the obstacles. From a purely human standpoint your choices and actions are admirable: you treat the young woman with respect, show your gratitude for her friendship, do not disrupt her life by pressuring her. I applaud your nobility of spirit! This is a poem you can show to anyone without fear of being misunderstood or causing offense. It seems tome you wrote this on the far side of desire. Desire no longer burns fiercely, you are making peace with this unrequited love. OR if your desire still burns within, you are not imposing it on her or others. What you have written is a quiet, measured, grateful good-bye to an impossible to achieve romance. Sincerity is its outstanding feature. That is my overview of your poem.
    I have some things to say about LYRIC in contrast to narrative elements in a poem about emotions I'll later today.
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Poem Submitted: Wednesday, September 9, 2015

Poem Edited: Wednesday, September 9, 2015


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