Soumita Sarkar Ray

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Too Cute... - Poem by Soumita Sarkar Ray

an infatuation grew in me.....outmoded..outlandish...illogically about a short love story..?

And got hooked
but, who is that crook?
That lad not so cute
Yet managed his cuts
into my manoeuvred mask

Ha! and I stood still
when he gazed and killed
To urge a straight reply
It's a drill to resist the feel

Man are you mad?
You teach don't forget
You foil your page
Cause-a sweet deviate

This close connection
Shall spell distress
You'll manage as you handled
Novice'll dwindle and battle

A shake of your hand
Will be a treasure
Years later a memory for you
His touch of a crushing pleasure

You can't ask -Do you miss?
Never exchange -Yes I miss.
This all fuss is just a mess
You are far in age and flesh.

Topic(s) of this poem: love educates

Comments about Too Cute... by Soumita Sarkar Ray

  • (2/24/2017 9:39:00 PM)

    Hi Soumita,

    A good poem of love and passion. But your passion for rhyme without reason made you compromise on POETRY. Pl see for yourselves:

    Man you are mad!
    After that I am sad
    Who is labelled bad?
    This close connection
    Has made us true glad.

    More rhyme, less poetry here. Truly unlike your other poems.

    You always do retain quality of your poetry above all.

    So my request, please do not give in for the temptation of rhymes, play of words etc, at the cost of poetic quality, brevity which are truly characteristic of your poems.

    Would love to read more of them.
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  • (2/24/2017 11:08:00 AM)

    Hi Soumita,

    Love teaches you a lot. How true, ..
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  • Souren Mondal (11/17/2015 3:09:00 AM)

    Franklu, not as good as the other poems of yours that I have read, but it does speak of something really valuable... Love always begins with infatuation and if it doesn't change from their into something more mature and rational... Ya, it's complicated. Thank you for sharing.. (Report) Reply

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Poem Submitted: Thursday, June 5, 2014

Poem Edited: Sunday, February 26, 2017

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