Utopia Poem by Baharak Barzin

Utopia

Rating: 5.0


When the earth is turning and turning
And the moon is sleeping behind the golden ball
When human are wasting the lost treasure
I would ride my chariot to the secret land
Where the hearts are real
And the smiles are clear
Where, i can exist more than ever

Thursday, July 27, 2017
Topic(s) of this poem: life
COMMENTS OF THE POEM
Daniel Brick 31 July 2017

Since this UTOPIA is a Sleep Reality, and not located in material space or time, you identify it poetically - WHEN THE EARTH IS TURNING AND / AND THE MOON, etc. both of these motions are cosmic and give your poem the same cosmic rhythm, vast and slow: that is the time frame of your Utopia. And you describe the human population in the most optimistic terms: their moral nature is one of REAL HEARTS and CLEAR SMILES, which I take to mean there is no hypocrisy, deception, manipulation happening. You don't have to fear these things which can make a person overly cautious or just stop taking risks. And you can speak what your heart holds and act according to your happiest hopes because if this HONESTY and TRUST which prevails. That's what your statement I CAN EXIST MORE THAN EVER. In your Utopia your don't have to be a different person: you can be yourself, which is exactly what you want. Your dreams will be fulfilled and your integrity affirmed. What a glorious dream! And you are writer, producer, director and star. I love the sheer confidence in this image of Self: I RIDE MY CHARIOT TO THE SECRET LAND. You've shared this utopian dream with me so it's no longer a total secret, but I would never NEVER do anything to dispel or diminish its value to you.

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Baharak Barzin 01 August 2017

Daniel thank you for spending time on my poetry. Well the chariot in my poem symbolise my soul that i ride it through a wonderland where i really can live without anger and resentment.

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Jazib Kamalvi 28 July 2017

A nice poetic imagination, Baharak. You may like to read my poem, Love and Lust. Thanks

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