Viewing The Eclipse Poem by Patti Masterman

Viewing The Eclipse



I pierced through the cardboard,
To allow the eclipse of your love
To show through me
Onto flimsy paper.

They told me to look straight on
Could cause blindness-
But I'm not sure that a single sight of you
Would not suffice for the rest of my life.



Jan.1 2010

COMMENTS OF THE POEM
John Knight 14 January 2010

Hi Patti - Nice to have you back - Poetic and in your right mind. This is a minipoem with a big impact. I score it ten for it's pathos and free versification. V 1 Mega Love (as you know) is like the SUN it can be dangerous if seen full frontal so we need a screen and a projection. V 2 You were warned Patti but being you you craved for a view. The last two lines have a deliberate double negative to make them ambiguous 'Bit I'm NOT sure that a single sight of you - Would NOT suffice for the rest of my life'. I can assure you it would Patti. But WHEN and WHERE and HOW. The tragedy is Patti I saw you once in the Mall in Oklahoma City. Unfortunately I was going up the escalator and you were going down - I saw you (and perhaps it will have to suffcice me for the rest of my life) unfortunately you didn't see me - and as you know people who pass on escalators are doomed never to meet again. I go back evevry year at the same time - but perhaps it was only a vision of your lovliness and not acctually you. 'But I'm sure that a single sight of you - Will suffice for the rest of my life'. Thank you for once again for stirring our imaginations. Love you lots in Poetry - JOHN X X X

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Carol Gall 02 January 2010

sounds like a love poem 10

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