Laurence Overmire


Wade In The Wave - Poem by Laurence Overmire

Every stone I cast
on water ripples

to the edge of an unknown
world

and when in time
another stone skims past

the hand I know not
rippling why

remembers
the choosing of the rock

its color and touch
immortal, divine.


(Previously published in Poetry: Soul to Soul, July 2004; World's Strand Anthology,2007)


Comments about Wade In The Wave by Laurence Overmire

  • (4/11/2006 11:22:00 AM)


    I never got past four skips....but this poem is definately ten skips in my book. Well done! (Report) Reply

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  • (4/11/2006 11:05:00 AM)


    Good poem. I like the way it works on more the one level. I found myself slightly disjointed by the ambiguity of the reference of the last line ('immortal, divine'): it seems to me to refer to the choosing of the rock, and not its characteristics, yet the construction suggests that its characteristics are what are referred to as 'immortal, divine', a suggestion I'm more skeptical about.

    If you'd like to sharpen the reference, you could include the rock's characteristics within parentheses, and remove the line space within the last four lines:

    'remembers
    the choosing of the rock
    (its color and touch)
    immortal, divine.'

    It really depends upon your intention.
    I really like the lines

    'the hand I know not
    rippling why'

    Lovely.
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  • (4/11/2006 10:39:00 AM)


    Lovely work, bringing back wonderful memories of my husband and boys skimming stones every time we went to the beach. I think 5 or 6 skims was their record. Thanks for this. 10 from Tai, skimming but not in that way! (Report) Reply

  • Brian Dorn (4/11/2006 10:38:00 AM)


    Ah, yes... the perfect rock! Interesting write!
    Brian
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Poem Submitted: Tuesday, April 11, 2006

Poem Edited: Sunday, April 6, 2008


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