What Is Better Than Hobbit? Poem by Liza Sud

What Is Better Than Hobbit?

What is better than Hobbit? - the Fantasy style,
that's developing in my mind.
It is turning crazy - to blue, to white,
not this frozen earth like a tyle,

I will turn it crazy - white waterfalls
of enormous - like heartbeat - height.
it will be more crazy than your own Zohar,
and will have even more might.

You taught me to open my gates and crush,
you said beauty is never deep.
It is deep of course, but not deep enough.
to make people find God and blush.

And my poetry wiill never let you in -
it'll just stand like a pillar of mind.
But it will inflame you and it will lead,
and will lift up your present stand.

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Что прекрасней, чем Хоббит? - Стиль фэнтези,
и его разовьёт мой мозг.
Я сойду с ума - в синий, белый тон,
лучше мерзлой земли, как мозоль,

Я сойду с ума - в белый водопад -
до огромных - как пульс - высот.
это будет безумнее, чем Зоар,
и куда как сильнее мощь.

Ты меня научил открывать, крушить,
и что нет глубин в красоте
глубоко, конечно, но не найти
в этом Бога, чтоб покраснеть.

Но мои стихи не пропустят вас -
будут просто - как столб ума.
Но вас поведут и воспламенят
и поднимут то, где стоят.

What Is Better Than Hobbit?
Thursday, October 27, 2016
Topic(s) of this poem: fantasy
COMMENTS OF THE POEM
Daniel Brick 27 October 2016

You seem to be comparing conventional worship practices with an alternative style of worship which will be more exciting, engaging, persuasive than present styles. And you term this innovative style FANTASY, the term borrowed from Fantasy Literature like Tolkien. You use the word CRAZY to describe the transcendent nature of this new liturgy, it will outshine even the impressive style derived from Zohar. You hope, of course, this new approach will bring people to God. The last stanza is unclear to me: first, you say your poems will not be understood by outsiders. Then you describe your poems as having a strong impact on people. I'm unclear about this ending.

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