Aiden Florence

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What It Feels Like To Be Dead - Poem by Aiden Florence

Nothing I could say
Would ever be the same
Those petals fallen
Like the angel's blessings

I cried
It was such bitter divide
Tears struck that night
Like the angel's merciless deceit

And searching
And searching
And searching
For something to believe in life

After the fallen moment
There was only misery no delight

The doors remain closed
The light remains blocked
The exit isn't there
My world's becoming a nightmare

The search is over
There's nothing left for me here
My mind is so jaded
Why can't I love again....

I'm crying
Then screaming
Nothing's changing
No one's caring

I'm dead
I've been this way
I don't exist in your world
And I can't love you again


Comments about What It Feels Like To Be Dead by Aiden Florence

  • (12/14/2009 9:10:00 PM)


    I agree, its deep.
    there is a typo for the second remain*
    the very first stanza is amazing, it stuck out to me instantly.
    i know that this is supposed to be dark and sad. but aiden, i dont see it...
    i mean its sad..but i dont want to start crying, for some reason, i am seeing happiness.
    this is a very good poem. and yes down there, he's an amazing poet!
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  • Prince Obed de la Cruz (12/3/2009 1:54:00 AM)


    deep... nice write... i'm a person whose interest is focused on what is positive and i always want to read poems, stories, and other texts with an happy ending. but this one is smooth and good if i will base it to the rules in poetry. you are a good poet. (Report) Reply

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Poem Submitted: Thursday, December 3, 2009

Poem Edited: Tuesday, December 15, 2009


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