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~you'Re Heavy On My Mind~

It's silent
except for the buzzing
of the flourescent lights
in this deserted classroom.
I should be studying
but my thoughts keep drifting
back to our talk.

Is it possible
to make time for ''us''

without taking from ''them''?
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Alison Cassidy 09 November 2006

This is a beautiful poem that gracefully articulates the dilemma faced by many 'couples' who try to accommodate conflicting demands. Your use of the buzzing of the flourescent lights to begin and end this poem works effectively and your compassionate, but understated delivery makes the situation even more poignant. Excellent work, Mary. love, Allie xxxxxxxxxxxxxxx

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Brilliant Mary, a lovely title and a lovely poem to go with it. Very well put together. Love Ernestine XXX

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This is an amazing write, Mary....tells the plight of the middle-class romantic dyad....sometimes you have to just revert back to 'common folk' - and remind yourself that family does come first.

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Lylyanna Pilewski 28 May 2006

awwwwwwww Ilove it! ! ! ! ! ! ! ! ! ! ! ! Lylyanna

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MARY...BEAUTIFUL WRITE...WELL CRAFTED...SMOOTH FLUX...AWESOME THEME...'''''''''''''''''FRANK

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