11 The Shooting Star Poem by Athul KrishnaA

11 The Shooting Star

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I was looking the stars one night,
On a clear new moon night,
When suddenly I saw a shooting star
Coming nearer me
Just like in a dream
It landed just beside me
Oh! It was burning
But cold; and then
Without a warning
A small hand from inside
Pushed me in suddenly!
I saw a small man
The size of a dog
With very small hands
And really long legs,
Looking at me with snake-like eyes
He turned around and oh!
He had the back of a fish with
Small wings the size of a mouse
He pressed a small button
And lo!
In front of me lay wonderful feast!
I started to eat greedily,
But stopped as something changed in me
I soon became just like the man who pushed me in!
Suddenly something queer started happening
Every thing shook violently
And water was poured all over me
I closed and opened my eyes
To face my very cross mother! ! !

COMMENTS OF THE POEM

Young man, you have impressed me, greatly. There is much talent within you...and boudless potential awaiting to be tapped. Don't ever put that pen down....You have a very valuable gift....one that will stay with you, for your entire lifetime.One that will instill wisdom, foresight, image & discipline in whatever you decide to do. I wish i had started writing when i was your age.This is a fine piece of poetic work, Athul.Good Luck to you & i'll be watching out for your ultimate continued progress. ~ FjR ~ ..2008..

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Chez Dalton 22 April 2008

lol awesome it's funny

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