53 Sweet Inside I Was

Rating: 4.4

Sweet inside I was
When young was my age
In heir hands, all children
Of the world wished me
And one day one of theirs
Wish came true
And shocking me, suddenly
Tore me apart
And ate all my insides
Like a lion does to a deer
In me, when nothing was left
Used me to wrap a rock
And threw me away
Into a river
And all the way to
The bottom went I
Years passed and
This day I celebrate
My hundredth birthday
Under the waters
Of this never to
Dried up river............

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COMMENTS OF THE POEM
Raj Nandy 24 May 2008

Atul, For your age this writing is really great! Keep writing and also reading poems of renowned poets. Best wishes. -Raj Nandy

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Kesav Easwaran 23 May 2008

This poem shows you have tremendous imaginative power at this young age...the sign of becoming a good poet. Keep writing poems. Ten marks.

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Albert M. Rosarda 22 May 2008

Great poem! And you're only ten years old? You have a bright future ahead as a poet.

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Dr Antony Theodore 23 November 2017

suddenly Tore me apart And ate all my insides Like a lion does to a deer In me, when nothing was left Used me to wrap a rock........ great imagination dear poet........... thank you very much for this poem dear poet.. tony

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Anjana Asok 31 May 2008

it is alovely poem athul.you are still like a young brother to all of us. keep up your good work.

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James Foulk 29 May 2008

very creative and well written. i give you a nine

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Nkululeko Mdudu 28 May 2008

wow! wonderful work athul, emptiness in the old is a sad thing indeed. -nkuli

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rajagopal haran 24 May 2008

I read it in the philosophical way...mortal becoming immortal after shedding ego...wonderful

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