20 A Wonderful Dream Poem by Athul KrishnaA

20 A Wonderful Dream



I was dreaming that
A Lady was screaming
As if surrounded bugs
But really was surrounded by thugs
I was Spider man
They took her awy on a van
I got in front of the van quickly
The thugs fought angrily
The van drove away splashing water on me
I suddenly opened my eyes to see
It was 8 in the morn!

COMMENTS OF THE POEM
Kesav Easwaran 22 April 2008

and you let that lady go with the thugs? in case your mother springled water on you, tonight you wear a water proof jacket and go dreaming. fight back the thugs! ... and never sleep till eight! for your age you are very talented. keep dreaming... keep writing.... all the best

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Afshin Azizi 22 April 2008

Lacks depth and vision but u have plenty of time ahead of u to nurture ur potential the supposed surprising ending is a bit of a cliche in some silent movies.

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