Akhtar Jawad

Gold Star - 109,250 Points (8-2-1945 / Gorakhpur)

A Comment - Poem by Akhtar Jawad

My friend, I know you're a teacher,
for the students, a great preacher,
but when you come back at home,
don't you see yourself in Rome?
Keep for students your moral teaching.
Come to the readers after total bleaching.

Why don't you remain always poetic?
Don't you have a balance at home?
I know you are truly aesthetic,
write a page of love and burn the tome.
Even a word of love is better than a book,
Have in a mirror your lovely nice look!

(A Fantasy a great poem by Valsa George.
Dozing on a hammock
Strung between two towering palms
With the sky above-
colour washed in turquoise blue
and the waters below
reflecting that heavenly hue,
you came to me
sailing in a dream
like the strains of a symphony
causing endless vibrations
in my solitary heart
you showed up
all too sudden
like a rainbow on my vacant sky
after a cloud burst of cloistered grief
to blaze it with iridescent shades
Your smile
embalmed my bruised spirit
with the coolness of a summer drizzle
falling, like manna
over starved Israelites
in their arduous odyssey
through blistering sands
Your passionate breath,
spewed on my face
bore the scent of opening buds
in the mazy tangle of wild creepers
growing dense in nearby woods.
Your amorous whispers
fell in my ears
with the sweetness of the melody
from Krishna's flute
with Radha near, love sick)
her lips curled in an immaculate smile.
Your soft footsteps
like the jingle of a court dancer
echoed in the silence of my soul
with a hundred evocations
As the jingles
came nearer in synchronizing rhythm
I held out my arms
to clasp you in tight embrace
and reel you in frenzied jig
But you vanished,
vanished,
with the swiftness
of bubbles rising and breaking
in a beer glass,
leaving me to my desolate zone
The sky overhead had changed
into another shade
Still I lay in mid air,
with my eyes sealed tight
to re-live that dream
once again!

Topic(s) of this poem: fantasy


Comments about A Comment by Akhtar Jawad

  • (9/22/2015 5:01:00 AM)


    Two lovely poems from two writers whom I admire.
    I don't know why but I feel that I must write
    a poem about them in my own clumsy way.-10
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  • Valsa George (9/5/2015 1:52:00 AM)


    Akhtarji..... How I should thank you for this publicity! I feel awed and embarrassed! Happy that you wrote a great poem for me and quoted my own poem! You are too mischievous I must say! A 10. (I am in a hurry.... going to attend a function. I will be back only tomorrow) I shall read the poem once again later, also some other poems of yours! (Report) Reply

  • (9/4/2015 7:38:00 PM)


    A wonderful comment, on a wonderful poem of a wonderful poetess...........................10 (Report) Reply

  • Kumarmani Mahakul (9/4/2015 4:18:00 PM)


    Read and enjoyed. Challanged depictioon with excellent collocation.. Thanks for sharing. .....10 (Report) Reply

  • Akhtar Jawad (9/4/2015 12:51:00 AM)


    Here is Valsa's comment on her poem.
    Just being poetic, Fr. Augustine! Thank you for reading the poem!
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Poem Submitted: Friday, September 4, 2015

Poem Edited: Friday, April 28, 2017


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