' A Fine Line Poem by Linda Ori

' A Fine Line

Rating: 2.9


My heart I place upon the line,
Not knowing is the worst -
Have I the right to want for more,
Or if I do, be cursed?

To be content as in the past
Is safe in many ways -
Yet, I don't wish to settle now
And simply count my days;

Instead I long to understand
This newness that you bring,
I feel myself awakening
Like blossoms in the spring;

So many things I've yet to learn,
Perhaps that's why you're here -
I dare not interrupt your life
And yet I want you near;

I have no right to make demands,
For I am just your friend,
But now that I'm aware of you,
I cannot comprehend

My life without you in it -
Already I have changed,
I never want to lose you now
That you have rearranged

My thoughts, and yes, my feelings
They will never be the same -
My peaceful world's turned upside down
And baby, you're to blame.

My heart I place upon that line,
While I am contemplating
What's right for you - what should I do?
Impatiently.............I'm waiting.


3/18/2009

COMMENTS OF THE POEM
Ramesh Rai 02 October 2011

Respected Poetess Really i am too little to make any comment on your poem. but after all i feel a matured composition. i like to request you earnestly to read my poem and please let me know about my feelings good or bad and which one you liked most. I shall feel lucky to get your comments. some poems are in different language but most are in english with kind regards sincerely yours ramesh rai rkrai100@gmail.com

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Jim Hogg 04 May 2009

It's a very fine line and this one is full of fine lines on the issue of where to stand/what to do when things are so in the balance. And it's full of what you do so well. Herbert was here for lessons I'll bet, and appears to have been later on the scene than he thought. I remember when someone had asked about flowing rhythmic poetry in the forum and you directed them to Charlie Moore and me! ! Serious modesty. We couldn't hold a candle to you on those counts, and that's the truth. xxx

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Anita Atina 19 March 2009

Piquant choice. Lovely poem with a steady, warm hum that was pleasing to the ear and to the heart.

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