Welcome to the land of flowers
Where they are trampled before blossom
The land ruled by tyrants
Shedding blood is a common practice
Welcome to the place called paradise
Every inch is owned by demons in disguise
Here..the land is all colourful
Blossoms are always mournfull
Welcome my dear to the peaceful land
Inocents being eaten by a vulture band
Fangs are shown in the form of smile
Desert is their heart and blood is oil
Crooks in power and killers protect
Death is common..a matter of fact
A sister is raped...a brother killed
Condolences offered...duty is fulfilled
I live in a place where killing is trend
Enemies are enemies and enemy is a friend
Welcome to a place thats a living cemetry
Kashmir is name where death is a sentry
In a corner of view we are iving in a living cementry where Blossoms are always mournfull, where there is fear of rape, death and inhumanity and where killing is trend and enemy is friend. Dear Akash, you have touchingly inscribed this in your poem 'A Living Cementry' that I appreciate most. The last two lines viz. Welcome to a place thats a living cemetry Kashmir is name where death is a sentry.. are most attractable. This is a beautiful poem on present society and patriotic in a couplet form. Many thanks my dear Akash, keep the ball rolling with an eye to English grammar. I hope, you will be a great poet in future. May God bless you and your family....10
Aakash, you're welcome and good luck with your future poetic endeavors! Yrs, JC
Aakash, the emotion driving this poem is strong. However, your ESL(?) problems with articles and English idioms hurt the piece. Maybe stop writing for awhile and read some good contemporary poetry in English (Billy Collins, Mary Oliver?) If you have time, check out my new website: jeffersoncarterverse.com Tell me how you like it. Yrs, JC
I will surely watcgout for the mistakes sir.... As for the spelling mistakes and articles...i have this stupid cell that tottally contradicts my thumb pressing on its keys.... And as you suggested i will definitely read the said poetry and visit your website also.... Thanks for the precious feedback sir...i will learn a lot from you....i hope i will have you always correcting me like this....thanks
This poem has not been translated into any other language yet.
I would like to translate this poem
excellently depicted the modern world here, why only Kashmir? thanks,10
Just a metaphor....to represent the cruelty
Tjanks sir