When my sad heart
................can bear no more parting,
An angel of comfort
..........................is sent to relieve.
Whispered words circle
...................like breath in my mind.
Softly honed thought
................flutters its wings discreetly.
Fills my ears with song
...................that's not far but near.
Assures me you are
......................but a whisper away.
a structure unique to you...and the thought in this poem is excellent...he is omnipresent....10
i like the way you play with the structure.. i loved the wording too.
At first I thought endorphins. Then it dawned on me, a rather brilliant poem. Hxx
Fear not! dear Fay, for i will always guide you, in life or death i will prevail go forth where you your heart dost bide you! for where your heart, i am avail my sword dos't strike thy meanest foe, whilst i you worship head to toe! my life i lay before your feet, lest blood be spent upon the street
This poem has not been translated into any other language yet.
I would like to translate this poem
Impressive structure....and i think you know how obsessively meticulous i am with the aesthetics of my structural work(Right margin alignment) sometimes almost to the point of uncosciously compromising metre for looks, before i realize it, and then attempt to achieve both, or something close. I mention this, as you have indeed achieved both here, Fay. Al attractive, eye-pleasing structure...and an even-flow movement like silk on satin! FjR