Fay Slimm

Rookie - 102 Points (Ageless. / in Cornwall U.K.)

A Day In The Life Of A Child - Poem by Fay Slimm

Cheeks dimpling
Two eyes gleam
Lips parting.
Baby's smiling.

Nose crinkling
Red mouth curls
Eyes are twinkling.
Baby's clowning.

Toes gripping
Two knees bend.
Feet are moving,
Baby's walking.

Mind wandering,
Gaze intense,
Brow is puckering,
Baby's 'pottying'

Lips smacking,
Two jaws race,
Cheeks are bulging,
Baby's eating.

Head bobbing,
Fingers twirl,
Knees are knocking,
Baby's dancing.

Eyes closing,
Two hands still.
Senses dozing,
Ssssh - Baby's sleeping.

Comments about A Day In The Life Of A Child by Fay Slimm

  • (7/28/2015 1:01:00 AM)

    Sweet piece. Reminds me of my own when infants.Thanks (Report) Reply

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  • Ravi A (4/5/2009 12:50:00 PM)

    The last four lines are enough. You have rightly hit it. We can also experience the sleep. (Report) Reply

  • (1/16/2009 9:52:00 AM)

    Simplicity and honesty in your tone makes this a wonderful read...
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  • (11/20/2008 11:14:00 AM)

    near perfection in its simplicity M lady (Report) Reply

  • (11/15/2008 5:44:00 PM)

    A precious little poem, inspired methinks by old nursery rhymes. Love the rhythm, the simplicity of the language and the beat of the piece. Yes, a lovely children's poem for grownups to enjoy. (or vice versa if you like?) love, Allie ♥ ♥ ♥ ♥ (Report) Reply

  • Loyd C. Taylor, Sr. (11/10/2008 10:34:00 AM)

    Hello Fay and that was just about picture perfect, I felt as if I was watching the little one through out. Great read! Loyd (Report) Reply

  • (10/14/2008 1:35:00 AM)

    ! The most wonderful aroma in this world, is the smell of a baby in a fathers arms,
    till they need changing of corse!
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  • (10/9/2008 12:30:00 PM)

    I like the simplicity of yjis one, just like the life of a child. (Report) Reply

  • (9/26/2008 12:59:00 AM)

    divine. best word i can use. fay, you have a wonderful way with words. (Report) Reply

  • (9/16/2008 10:52:00 AM)

    Several thngs jumped out at me while reading this entertaining and extremely well written poem, Fay. First, I noticed how tersely it was written, using a minimum of words to convey such vivid impressions. I also noted how smoothly it was written and that every word flowed into the next word perfectly. I was quickly aware of how accurate and expressive your words were as well. All of this points to the fact that you are a most talented and experienced poet and certainly a great pleasure to read. Carl. (Report) Reply

  • Palas Kumar Ray (9/15/2008 3:31:00 PM)

    Nice write on a very nice subject.He who have reared a child knows the joy of it.
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  • (9/13/2008 7:18:00 PM)

    another beutiful write sir...while reading i was imaginig my naphew who's 2ys now...thanks...10 (Report) Reply

  • (9/10/2008 8:45:00 AM)

    beautiful, i was grinning like a baby...you've made me wanna have a baby now! ! ! (Report) Reply

  • (9/3/2008 12:17:00 PM)

    awwww this is suchhh a sweeeet poem...very very well written..i love the style..youve done it so well without overdoing anything....the love and tenderness shine through.delightful! ..a 10..by a mother..! : > (Report) Reply

  • (8/23/2008 3:16:00 PM)

    I was fortunate enough to work shifts when my children were babies So enjoyed it all inclding changing dirty nappia You portray it well in a few words (Report) Reply

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Poem Submitted: Thursday, July 31, 2008

Poem Edited: Saturday, August 2, 2008

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