Alankar(Decor)-253 Poem by Indira Renganathan

Alankar(Decor)-253

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The Disciplined Mother (Alternating Sonnet)

The Alternating Sonnet is one of the French adaptations of the sonnet.
It employs alternating quatrains and tercets.

The elements of the Alternating Sonnet are:

the quatorzain is made up of alternating tercets and quatrains.
rhymed, rhyme scheme abba ccd abba ede or ccd abba ede abba
or same envelope rhymed quatrains alternating with rhymed tercets at the poet's discretion.
pivot or volta at L8, L11 or L12.


The Disciplined Mother
(rhyme scheme-ccd abba ede abba)

I am a strict and stern father and that
I expect my kids be disciplined at
Their best level, be well groomed and righteous

Sun and moon and stars and all in nature
Obey God's laws and are all duty-bound
Why not humans too be morals abound
I want my kids too so be like nature

Good children grown as noble men today
Right path, right march, right deeds, they're virtuous
I'm proud when starts and ends good every day

Now I get a vision of my mother
Shouting at her son who all years wasted
Whom she wanted to be too disciplined
Who couldn't but raised his sons like his mother

COMMENTS OF THE POEM
Valsa George 31 January 2019

Disciplining of the children is necessary! But too much of discipline can often do the negative effect! Correct them gently and make them believe that we really mean their well being! You have described a common situation where rigid discipline can backfire!

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M Asim Nehal 30 January 2019

Nice alankar within the format. Thoughtful and profound.10++

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