Rory Hudson

Rookie - 129 Points (10 January 1952 / Adelaide, Australia)

Along The Path - Poem by Rory Hudson

I wish I could have eased your pain
as once we walked along the path
that led along a grassy ridge
and round the hill, and back again.

Beseeching what I could not give
you turned your pale face up to mine;
your eyes were moist with fading dreams
that you might hope, that you might live.

The path is now all overgrown
that years ago we used to tread,
and others walk it now, like us,
with dreams they cannot call their own.

The wind blows coldly through the night
and drowns the songs you might have sung
to ease the darkness in your heart
until the early morning light.

And I wish that you could ease my pain
as in my dreams I tread the path
that vanishes in wilderness
and never will come back again.


Comments about Along The Path by Rory Hudson

  • (7/15/2009 2:38:00 PM)

    So wonderfully written and moving poem..I agree with Lillian on rhyme and rhythm it posseses. Thanks for sharing.
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  • (5/2/2009 10:50:00 PM)

    this is quite an astonishingly moving poem! The rhyme and rhythm are not forced. They fit the mood perfectly. Your word choices also match the mood and meaning. Very well done! (Report)Reply

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  • (4/17/2009 11:41:00 PM)

    this is a beautiful poem.. 'your eyes were moist with fading dreams' i absolutely love that line 10 (Report)Reply

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  • (3/24/2009 2:37:00 AM)

    this is so beautiful. i love romance books and this is just like reading one of them(just much shorter) ... (Report)Reply

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  • (2/27/2009 10:11:00 PM)

    Very pleasant and beautiful poem...along with a systematic structure...nice one (Report)Reply

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  • Myrtle Thomas (2/27/2009 9:54:00 PM)

    Awe so much to think about! i have been there too at a place in bygone days.life is full of memories for us all.Thanks for sharing (Report)Reply

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Poem Submitted: Friday, February 27, 2009



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