Kevin Carney

Rookie (New York)

America And Apple Pie - Poem by Kevin Carney

Apple pie…
Watermelon…
The Fourth of July.
America....
The free…
Where did you go?
Media machine…
Intelligence lost…
President…
Proud and strong…
The American King.
Weak and reckless…
Un-American…
Looking to the New World Order…
No longer free…
Power lost…
Respect for a once proud nation, lost…
America....…
Have we let it go too far?
Once free…
Divided it has become…
People in uproar…
Seeking the better…
No one found to take the lead…
Riots in the streets…
Gone the days…
Anyone remember what the founding fathers had said?
America....…
Where has it all gone?
Family weekends….
And Sunday drives…
Going nowhere…


Comments about America And Apple Pie by Kevin Carney

  • (8/9/2010 5:17:00 PM)


    When writing a list poem keep in mind those 3 parts of literary form(opening, turning, & closing) Realize that the order of the list become sequential in nature. what comes first and what follows is very important. Also what is placed next to each other in parallel structures will create metaphorical antithesis as well. Which will make the depth of the poem more meaningful. The turning idea seems to be that America has changed. So all those lines need to be at least 2/3s of the way through the poem and not in the first half at all. You might want to think about your sequence a bit more. And I do agree with you corporate America has grown to stuffing their pockets without any morality at all. Banks that bet on going broke and paying bonuses for doing it do not have the American dream in mind at all.

    a poet friend
    RH Peat
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  • (8/6/2010 11:47:00 PM)


    'Anyone remember what the founding fathers had said? '

    Yes I remember, and the Christian principles they believed in,
    sought to gift infuse, within a nation created, upon divine principles,
    administered in dreams, hopes aspirations, for eventual good of all citizens,
    before the modern twentieth century lie, separation of church and state.

    The founding fathers, endeavoured to create a nation, based upon divine doctrine.
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Poem Submitted: Friday, August 6, 2010



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