Any Discriination Poem by Mehta Hasmukh Amathaal

Any Discriination

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My eyes danced
It was just chance
Purely accidental
To see rose with open petals

Words may prove less effective
As she stood very much subjective
Not a symbol of beautiful object
But different entity as matte of fact

You may find such things in flowers
As they come up with natural colors
To stand with different show
Shake the whole plant when wind mildly blows

I could not take off eyes away
She was on her way out
I had come to se off friend at airport
She had descended as from heavenly port

I will speak not about beauty alone
But about elegant walk to seen by all
It was like royal walk with great style
I witnessed it even from miles

“The beauty is joy for ever”
Legendary and modern poets remembered it forever
Why not we take leaf out and declare?
Any discrimination against females may be unfair

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Mehta Hasmukh Amathalal 29 September 2013

My eyes danced It was just chance

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Mehta Hasmukh Amathalal 29 September 2013

Post Long but well written Justin Shook20 minutes ago Your poem could use some work though. Here are my suggestions I'll put * at the end of any line I changed or fixed. My eyes danced It was just chance Purely accidental To see a rose with open petals* Words may prove less effective As she stood much more subjective* Not symbolic of a beautiful object* A different entity as a matter of fact* Flowers display such things* As they come up with natural colors* To stand with different show Mild winds shake them to the core* I could not take my eyes off* She was on her way out I had come to see off a friend at the airport* She had descended as from heavenly port I will speak not about beauty alone But about elegant walk to seen by all It was like royal walk with great style I witnessed it even from miles “The beauty is joy for ever” Legendary and modern poets remembered it forever Why not we take leaf out and declare? Any discrimination against females may be unfair.

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Mehta Hasmukh Amathalal 29 September 2013

Post Long but well written Justin Shook20 minutes ago Your poem could use some work though. Here are my suggestions I'll put * at the end of any line I changed or fixed. My eyes danced It was just chance Purely accidental To see a rose with open petals* Words may prove less effective As she stood much more subjective* Not symbolic of a beautiful object* A different entity as a matter of fact* Flowers display such things* As they come up with natural colors* To stand with different show Mild winds shake them to the core* I could not take my eyes off* She was on her way out I had come to see off a friend at the airport* She had descended as from heavenly port I will speak not about beauty alone But about elegant walk to seen by all It was like royal walk with great style I witnessed it even from miles “The beauty is joy for ever” Legendary and modern poets remembered it forever Why not we take leaf out and declare? Any discrimination against females may be unfair.

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Mehta Hasmukh Amathalal 29 September 2013

Discrimination against women has no justification Brian JacobsLess than a minute ago The poet wonders at how discrimination against women can exist when he confronts the beauty and majesty that is woman. The mere sight of the woman takes away all doubts that any discrimination cannot be justified. Comment 1 Comment+1 Hasmukh MehtaLess than a minute ago what i had in mind that ladies are subjected to forced rape merely for the reason that they are alone and beautiful we are witnessing such incidences often +1 fair vision

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Mehta Hasmukh Amathalal 29 September 2013

Andy Lyle3 minutes ago good work Comment +1 Okay

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Mehta Hasmukh Amathalal 29 September 2013

Janey Scaturro3 minutes ago Your English is a little off - but I got what you meant

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Vadali, Dist: - sabarkantha, Gujarat, India
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