Valerie Dohren

Gold Star - 6,769 Points (13 January 1947 / Southport)

Aquarius - Poem by Valerie Dohren

The Fish are dying
Polluted our crystal clear waters
Our once green valleys, choked and grey
With the debris of living
Lost is all Virginity
And the orbs clamber through space, gasping for breath

The trees are lifeless
Wilted the flowers
Only their deathly form remains
Impinged upon my soul - I grieve
For nature`s stolen life

Yet now a new Age dawns amidst the turmoil
Promise of a Golden Age for man
(Insensitive automaton)
And everywhere the cry:
'Big Brother is watching you'

Comments about Aquarius by Valerie Dohren

  • (8/19/2014 9:06:00 AM)

    the end of one era and the beginning of another cycle.. (Report) Reply

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  • Chris G. Vaillancourt (5/7/2014 10:08:00 AM)

    very nice imagery...this poem is very cool! (Report) Reply

  • Amitava Sur (4/14/2014 8:07:00 AM)

    A very thoughtful write detailing how the nature is threatened, though we try to camouflage . (Report) Reply

  • Heather Wilkins (7/31/2013 5:42:00 PM)

    this is the age of Aquarius good read (Report) Reply

  • (8/14/2012 1:27:00 PM)

    I really like how you feel in this write. We actually have very similar thoughts on nature. I am an avid birder too! Good job on the portraying of anger towards destruction and being kept under finger! (Report) Reply

  • (5/23/2012 8:22:00 PM)

    Stark observations. Fierce reminder that just because we live here, it doesn't mean we own the place. Great write. (Report) Reply

  • (5/21/2012 8:42:00 AM)

    concern for the world... (Report) Reply

  • Heather Wilson (4/11/2012 3:35:00 AM)

    A good insight into the world today, a very descriptive poem, nice one. (Report) Reply

  • Diane Hine (4/1/2012 7:42:00 PM)

    The first two stanzas serve as moving jabs to our consciences.
    The last illustrates very well the complexity of modern life.
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Poem Submitted: Saturday, February 11, 2012

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