Clive Culverhouse

Gold Star - 31,445 Points (England)

Artemis

Poem by Clive Culverhouse

ABORT ABORT
but Donaldson was already drifting
further and further away from us
the thickness of his suit decreasing
as his courageous kindness
floated on within his demise
and all I could do was stare panic stricken
through the small window's cruelness
as the white speck of my friend
became more and more surrounded
by the blackness of space
far removed from everything that existed
and I wondered if Donaldson would
explore the universe forever

Topic(s) of this poem: eternity, explorer, forever, goodbye, infinity, loneliness, poetic expression, science fiction, space


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Artemis by Clive Culverhouse
Snapshot poetry


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Comments about Artemis by Clive Culverhouse

  • Clive CulverhouseClive Culverhouse (6/21/2020 9:06:00 AM)

    This is one of my poems that is also on Write Out Loud.
    Here's a comment from that poetry site:



    " A hard subject brilliantly shared. I really like how it could be literal or metaphorical."(Report)Reply

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  • Clive CulverhouseClive Culverhouse (4/24/2020 7:36:00 AM)

    One of the most profound things the writing of this poem lent to was being so far away from anything; further from anything that has ever existed as you could get, a loneliness that cruises dimensions beyond comprehension. A loneliness fundamental to our fears and space would preserve Donaldson for eternity, infinite loneliness; some thought.(Report)Reply

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  • Mahtab BangaleeMahtab Bangalee (1/28/2019 3:40:00 AM)

    explore the universe forever..
    to learn own-self nature...! ./// lovely written(Report)Reply

    Clive CulverhouseClive Culverhouse(1/28/2019 4:30:00 AM)

    Appreciate your comment...

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  • Clive CulverhouseClive Culverhouse (12/18/2018 10:46:00 AM)

    Twitter comment:
    @abelfrageauthor - Right: @cliveculvers that is why I will never, ever don a spacesuit(Report)Reply

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  • Jayatissa K.Liyanage (9/16/2018 9:28:00 PM)

    and I wondered if Donaldson would
    explore the universe forever......................How else one would be able to console oneself over a horrible nightmare of the kind. Wonderfully crafted sensational poem.Congrats for being the member's PoD. Thank you for sharing.X(Report)Reply

    Clive Culverhouse(9/17/2018 2:41:00 AM)

    Thanks for commenting, Jayatissa

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  • Kumarmani MahakulKumarmani Mahakul (9/16/2018 8:47:00 AM)

    and I wondered if Donaldson would
    explore the universe forever....may be by the help of Artemis. Beautiful poem. Thanks and congratulation for being selected this poem as the poem of the day.(Report)Reply

    Clive CulverhouseClive Culverhouse(9/16/2018 9:27:00 AM)

    thankyou: ,

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  • Harley White (9/16/2018 8:25:00 AM)

    Oh my, how eerily, chillingly evocative and unexpected! Very intriguing Poem of the Day...(Report)Reply

    Clive Culverhouse(9/16/2018 9:29:00 AM)

    , thankyou,

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  • Adrian FlettAdrian Flett (9/16/2018 8:04:00 AM)

    Artemis the goddess of the hunter will be assisting him to, 'explore the universe forever'(Report)Reply

    Clive CulverhouseClive Culverhouse(9/16/2018 9:29:00 AM)

    Nicely picked up, thanks for commenting

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  • Jasbir ChatterjeeJasbir Chatterjee (9/16/2018 7:04:00 AM)

    Very interesting, sounds like space fiction, a nightmare, or something similar...Congrats on being Poet of The Day!(Report)Reply

    Clive CulverhouseClive Culverhouse(9/16/2018 7:40:00 AM)

    a nightmare indeed - but within it is subtly wrapped a moment of serenity

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  • Edward Kofi LouisEdward Kofi Louis (9/16/2018 4:18:00 AM)

    Surrounded! !

    Thanks for sharing.(Report)Reply

    Clive CulverhouseClive Culverhouse(9/16/2018 4:51:00 AM)

    Hey so pleased you picked out a key word - I wanted to suggest that space is enveloping him, devouring him, like something sinister, alive, an entity, rather than him just floating through a void. Thanks so much for reading and commenting! !

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  • Bernard F. AsuncionBernard F. Asuncion (9/16/2018 12:45:00 AM)

    Clive, such a wonderful poem of the day.
    Congrats for being chosen...10++++(Report)Reply

    Clive CulverhouseClive Culverhouse(9/16/2018 3:36:00 AM)

    Thanks for reading and leaving a comment

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Poem Submitted: Monday, September 3, 2018

Poem Edited: Tuesday, May 5, 2020