Babe You Left... Poem by Almedia Knight-Oliver

Babe You Left...

Rating: 5.0


Six remnants. Your shadows acutely damaged:
Severely tortured, are your survivors.
Two braids slouched on the shoulders

of a shamed Choctaw face, two beady eyes blinking, squinting
above an aquiline nose squawking at, the widow's peak concealed
under her wide-brimmed felt hat.

Your pigeon toes, almost, touching each other and making an X
Her aberrant child draw white sheep gathering across the sky.
Just as real as your remnants gathered underneath your hat.

Babe, you'll never know that a fragment of you, with zest, hawked your house,
sold your land to a non-kin; your remain planted far away yet not let go of her meanness and directed it to the rest of your lot.

You left your time-worn descendants holding Pandora's cache.
Misery destroyed most, evil, the one you took her as your best,
and your best, still renders tons of attack on the rest. Babe,
I, dare say that which be; you, took that which exist to the tomb.



January 15,2011

POET'S NOTES ABOUT THE POEM
Babe, mama's nickname...
COMMENTS OF THE POEM
Pranab K Chakraborty 26 January 2011

A classic one. From the first line to last is like a sculpture someone doing with the stoneness of heart. No magic, no exaggeration, no extra emotional galloping but with mathematical accuracy, its a complete poem. Perhaps a good writing always needs the proper analysis. But how I don't know. So I was so eager to send my reaction. Write more. Regards, pranab 10+++

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Lynn Glover 15 January 2011

Almedia, you have written a master piece and marriage nor honeymooning have hurt your writting. Just keep up the good work, you are already back in the flow and you can only get better. Your Pal, Lynn.

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