Hasmukh Amathalal

Gold Star - 413,573 Points (17/05/1947 / Vadali, Dist: - sabarkantha, Gujarat, India)

Castle In The Air - Poem by Hasmukh Amathalal

I try to come closer but unable to do
Fail to look in her eyes but that too proves untrue
What else can be done to prove my existence?
A stage of no control on mind in her presence

I try to build castles in the air
But it looks funny and unfair
If I can’t approach her with some authority
It is sign of weak person and bad quality

I am least concerned about a year nearing to an end
I am person of weak and unstable mind for anything to send
Neither a word of attachment nor a sign of true feelings
Inner cells are dying slowly with almost conscious killing

If such is the case with her presence
What can be state of long absence?
I fear about the unforeseen consequences
I try to find some lovely words with sentences

Nights seems to me as dark era in offing
I dance to the tune as joker in the circus ring
She is at the centre of complete show
My fears are confounded and certainly grow

Moon suddenly failed to draw my attention
Stars were fading and found no worth mention
“Night can’t shadow me or rule’” I asserted
I must see her with new approach and feel elated

She is worth million and needs special mention
Either in words or with some special composition
Poems can be an easy option with lots of appreciation
A reason worth deserving for building up of good relation

I must be good at conceiving the idea for lovely praise
She must get fair ideas of my motive and blind chase
First time I got worry lines off and little smile on face
After all it was long marathon and to be considered as race

It was undisputed and powerful arm in the hands of lover
Who at one point of time was failure and nonbeliever?
Today he has powerful ideas to influence and gain the access
What else can be termed it as saving off the lost face?


Comments about Castle In The Air by Hasmukh Amathalal

  • Rigzin Namgyal (1/2/2012 8:10:00 AM)


    great piece of writing
    i loved every line of it :)
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  • Mehta Hasmukh Amathalal (12/31/2011 7:38:00 PM)


    JRNightingale 2011.12.30 18: 32 Sometimes we reach for that which can not be attained. We have to try though. Reply (Report) Reply

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Poem Submitted: Friday, December 30, 2011



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