Chrysalism Poem by Vanta Moon

I understand. We lost our son a year ago. Be strong and write out your grief. It helps me. Keep your feelings flowing through your words and your heart.

Well articulated and nicely brought forth with insight. Thanks for sharing Vanta.

Too much of a good thing, Vanta. At first the repetition of the same end rhyme was pleasing, but only for about the first four, then it became a bore, and my ears got sore. When the lines stop making sense, then you know that you are forcing things and that you have gone too far. Line eight, for example. A drizzle commodore means nothing. A very good effort. Try using a variety of rhymes in your next one. Thanks for posting, and welcome to Poem Hunter!

I feel you in the clouds like a drizzle commodore: / I love it! Fantastic envelopment into the storming rain. How I love the rain too, Thank you! Dramatic, involving poem!

Tremendously resplendent in throes and love. An excellent manifestation of your talent and also of your feelings residing deep within you. You have a venerable poetic exuberance that I've longed for. Keep writing, dear poet. I hope your future poems too will be as maudlin as this.