College: A Girl At A Dance Poem by Brian Johnston
College: A Girl At A Dance
She sat in her chair unattended,
Her eyes moist with knowledge of that,
For earlier smiles had offended,
And so, thus discouraged, she sat.
She sat on the sidelines alone,
The flush of her cheeks was no act,
How could she ever atone,
To stranger's of innocence's fact?
Not one felt the warmth leave her glances,
Or witnessed the nights greatest theft;
A victim to vulgar romances,
The girl was the last one who left.
Oklahoma University Undergraduate (about 1963)
Of course the 'girl' was me in disguise, poor sad and alone little poet! 'Do not fear. There truly are those who will love you!
Great poem i love the line her eyes moist with knowledge of that sadly I have been that girl I really enjoyed reading this.Well done.I also like the tongue in cheek note.i give it a ten
Very good written theme of a lonely heart at a school dance...the poem make me wish I was there to say ' May I have this dance' great lines to read...regards
copied and pasted from online dictionary: a·tone ?'ton/ verb verb: atone; 3rd person present: atones; past tense: atoned; past participle: atoned; gerund or present participle: atoning make amends or reparation. he was being helpful, to atone for his past mistakes synonyms: make amends for, make reparation for, make restitution for, make up for, compensate for, pay for, recompense for, expiate, redress, make good, offset; do penance for how shall I atone for my mistakes? - - - - - - - - - - - - - - - - - - - besides not understanding the reference to atone there are several things i don't follow here. let me have another look. of course, you were still in the illiterate state of oklahoma, and in the state of innocence as far as proofreading was concerned; you haven't changed much in that regard, but i still like ya. DO you really want an apostrophe in stranger's and DON'T you really want an apostrophe in nights? ? :) - - - - - - - - - - - - - - - - my favorite stanza (it had a 33 1/3 % chance) : She sat in her chair unattended, Her eyes moist with knowledge of that, For earlier smiles had offended, And so, thus discouraged, she sat................. YOUR smiles? yes, i read your poet's note. believe me, Brian, if it was you sitting there, with one eyelash hanging loose and your bra on backwards, i too would be offended by your smiles, no matter how much powder and perfume you used! yes, those vulgar romance novels will do it every time! i avoided such embarrassment by staying away from most dances, but i did practice with my sister's bra at home when no one was looking. did your wives know? thanks, i think, for sharing. though the poem is not up to my expectations [after reading some of your others; some are really outstanding], i was taken by its frankness and that one stanza at least, so i'll send it to MyPoemList. bri :) - - - - - - - - - - - - - for your english-as-a-second-language readers: Frankness Frankness is defined as the quality of being open and honest. An example of frankness is telling the truth, even when it is painful to do so. frankness. Noun. of course i looked it up to be sure i was using it correctly!
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That was quite sad Brian. I was drawn in to feel empathy for this little wallflower. Even if it was you. The poem was nicely put together, and to the point, with some neat rhyme there. Well done.
This poem has not been translated into any other language yet.
I would like to translate this poem
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This poem is quite interesting. I like the flow.