Coma Poem by Anzelyne shideshe

Coma

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lingering memories in a coma,
Of the moon shining so bright,
Gazing brightly in the dark skies,
The galaxy bearing witness,
Listening to the eclipses of our hearts
To the whispers of our souls,
A wireless connection yet to unfold
The wind blowing, favourable scents
Scents from variable flowers,
And the sea Aroma,
What an exotic atmosphere,
From the perplexion of our touch,
To the throbbing of our hearts,
It's the tremble of our lips,
Magically magneted to the feel,
Breathless it was,
A heart attack we thought,
A sleep we fell,
Forever in a coma of romance,
It's harness makes us perspire
Ever in a coma of love.

Coma
Tuesday, December 15, 2015
Topic(s) of this poem: love
COMMENTS OF THE POEM
Bri Edwards 30 June 2018

(cont.) .. respire? (maybe perspire i thought) i 'had to' look up respire, thinking breathe. i found this: verb: respire breathe. & (of a plant) : carry out respiration, especially at night when photosynthesis has ceased. & literary: recover hope, courage, or strength after a time of difficulty. great PHOTO! photoshopped? bri ;)

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Anzelyne Shideshe 01 July 2018

Thanks for lending your third eye stay blessed @Bri Edwards

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Bri Edwards 30 June 2018

From the perpelexion of our touch, Might you MEAN perplexion? ? : Perplexion dictionary definition | perplexion defined - YourDictionary perplexion. Noun. (plural perplexions) Condition or state of being perplex; perplexity. A sleep we fell, ............perhaps Asleep? or A sleep we felt? (cont.) ..

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Anzelyne Shideshe 01 July 2018

Perplexion you right, but A sleep we fell I.e it is an expression of instantly falling into a coma not the normal sleeping experience, Respire giving it a thought you right but I used it just to emphasize on breathing as the main Verb.

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Anzelyne Shideshe 01 July 2018

Thanks for editing

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Edward Kofi Louis 21 May 2016

Breathless it was! Thanks for sharing this poem with us.

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Anzelyne Shideshe 05 November 2016

Love and tragedy what a mystery

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Paul Amrod 21 December 2015

Hi Anzelyne, I am gone through a lot of editing of my earlier works and now have to read this wonderful piece of yours. Magically magneted to the feel, Breathless it was, A heart attack we thought, A sleep we fell, Forever in a coma of romance, It's harness makes us respire, Ever in a coma of love This is a wonderfully seductive and sensual passage, Nice, marvelous! , Paul

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Anzelyne Shideshe 21 December 2015

Thanks for your wonderful thoughts.I'm humbled.

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Anzelyne Shideshe 21 December 2015

Thanks Paul for your wonderful thoughts.I'm humbled.

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