Carrie Sprouse

Rookie (October 21,1994 / United States)

Concrete Air - Poem by Carrie Sprouse

concrete wings
never leave the ground
the troubled angel
is never found

never return home
lost and alone
the wind is turning cold
they left you, disown

heartbeats decrease
your life you can't spare
weak bones, your unable to sustain
you no longer have air


Comments about Concrete Air by Carrie Sprouse

  • Ben Gieske (1/17/2009 6:30:00 PM)

    Nice format and lends itself well to the reading of this poem. You do well to think up new combinations of words (concrete wings, concrete airs) instead of relying on already used metaphors. (Report)Reply

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  • Silence Dogood (10/12/2008 11:09:00 AM)

    Another great write you are very talented (Report)Reply

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  • quercus : I've never got paid for my hits... (10/11/2008 7:33:00 PM)

    great write... 'concrete wings never leave the ground'... very true... and you get that when you never ask for it...but there's nothing to worry about - at least you can see the twisted truth and laugh at it... (Report)Reply

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Poem Submitted: Saturday, October 11, 2008



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