Dark Eden Poem by Eddie Roa

hi there! the poem is great only that it's full of sadness, loneliness and this could be only true in a dream. Anyway it sounds well and great.

This piece, as well as the others after it (I'm sure) is evocative of your Pointillist poem: it paints, not tells. The rhythm is just right allowing for a smooth flow of images. There is a grammatical situation in 'precision gauge measure' I think you have to choose which verb should have the 's'. If 'gauge' is a noun (defined by 'precision' then it's 'measures'. Would not 'all' be better then 'in esteem' since it also rhymes with 'small'? The last line of the 3rd stanza would look and sound better if you started it with 'To an audience...' Overall, another gem, Ed. The poet is a dreamer who wields magic with a two-letter wand 'if'.

dude what a poem! ! ! ! ! ! ! ! ! ! ! ! ! excellent. It's so hard to find someone who really gets it on here. You do. The imagery, the flow, the style- all perfect 10/10

I fail to appreciate the poetic logic. Dark nd cold under the sea yet you see well even if noonlight enters but not too brightly.. Bonfires under water? And yet the poem isn't surreal.

Brilliant imagery in this write Eddie, I enjoyed reading it, 10 Lynda xx

i couldn't agree more with the their comments sir...it's amazing..perhaps words are not even enough to describe your poem. And i know your putting your heart in it.. I have a new poem too.Entitled 'picture' i hope you can read it but its not necessary to give a comment. Thank you sir. Beautiful poem.

Wow Dark Eden is very well written. As soon as I started reading it I felt a chill go down my spine. Nice descriptions.

resonant images...skittering across the seas of my eyes

This is a brilliant word picture, Deb

I feel sad when reading this poem.. But well written Krista