Eddie Roa

Rookie - 3 Points (June 22,1942 / Manila. Philippines)

Red Lace - Poem by Eddie Roa

I espied a red glint
In between the cracks
On the wooden panels
Of a locked up closet

How many sphinxes
Stood guard with riddles.
Halting curious eyes?
No sentinel more vigilant

I caught glimpse of a
Red lace stuck
Between mahogany doors,
Some past vanity imagined

Standing there unmoving,
Drawn by intrigue, I was
Like a cat sniffing on
A netted pantry window

I stood beside the
Grim and ominous bureau
A piece of red lace
Clutched by wooden vise

Perplexed and unsettled
Mind wandering
The past insinuates
Rekindling flames
From cold embers

The band played on
Red lace swirling
In the garish glow
Of a festive December night

It was not I who held
Those delicate hands
As you pirouetted and
Caused an eddy in the crowd

Plain red lace seen
Awkward in between doors
What images it evoked
My tired eyes hardly make out
An unwanted remembrance

The memory now a saturated scene
My eyes no longer entertain
Sordid images resurrected
A glimpse of other’s paradise

I lost you once, oh what pain
Losing you again in recall
From a red lace
Stuck between closet doors

Comments about Red Lace by Eddie Roa

  • (3/25/2009 1:17:00 AM)

    Well done, ed. I enjoyed it. (Report) Reply

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  • (2/24/2009 6:54:00 PM)

    Er, dance not walk, or sing not talk. You get my point, Ed, do you not? (Report) Reply

  • (2/24/2009 6:52:00 PM)

    Francis' comments are well-taken here. I noticed, Ed, that you repeated 'red lace' five times in the poem when it's being the title would've been sufficient. Redundancy is one thing versifiers try to avoid to make the poem sing, not walk. (Report) Reply

  • Glenn Mark Amor (2/24/2009 8:21:00 AM)

    full of imaginations...Agggh! hehe! Like it! (Report) Reply

  • (2/24/2009 6:55:00 AM)

    Good. Surprise ending.
    I suggest:
    stanza 3, add article: 'I caught a glimpse'
    stanza 6, unwarranted tense shift; should be: 'The past insinuated'
    stanza 10: 'another's' (not: 'other's')
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  • (2/23/2009 4:55:00 AM)

    Another finely woven piece from you Eddie, poignant and heartfelt,
    Lynda xx
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  • (2/22/2009 10:09:00 PM)

    poignant poem woven with fine metaphors and simile..Thanks for the share...10+++ (Report) Reply

  • (2/20/2009 11:46:00 PM)

    resonant imagery...enchanting... (Report) Reply

  • (2/20/2009 4:15:00 PM)

    This one is very well written. The RED LACE references all the way through
    make the writing and the story memorable. This writing needs no rhythm and rhyme because of those references. A very nice piece and one that carries
    a kind of interest with it.

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  • (2/20/2009 11:56:00 AM)

    Nice one. Keeps your attention all the way through. Jim (Report) Reply

  • (2/20/2009 9:40:00 AM)

    How a small reminder can open a flood gate. (Report) Reply

  • (2/20/2009 7:21:00 AM)

    Brilliant use of red lace to paint bittersweet memories of a lost lover.

    Kind regards,

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  • (2/20/2009 5:35:00 AM)

    I really really like this one. Images darted in and out as your visions and memories played to the music of your mind. Karin Anderson (Report) Reply

  • (2/20/2009 4:23:00 AM)

    a great simile poem..nice piece...10 (Report) Reply

  • (2/20/2009 2:33:00 AM)

    it's sad and sweet at the same time.10! (Report) Reply

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Poem Submitted: Friday, February 20, 2009

Poem Edited: Monday, May 3, 2010

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