Seema Jayaraman

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Dawn's Aural Litany - Poem by Seema Jayaraman

Patter delicate feet, padding lightly
amongst crimson saucers erupts
righteous riots spontaneously
disrespect to dawns peace, bursts
winged foragers squabbling brazenly

hauled from slumber land abruptly
barely over headboard, extended nape
prise open a lash disobedient, flagrantly
popping one pupil, unfocussed gape
ensuing tree top bar brawl blatantly

cursing hidden raven, crowing noisily
unfocussed eyes surprise pair of robins
madly arbitrating chores domestically
hopping o'er delicate blossom crimsony
crested napes banner scarlet unapologetically

lashes as they rolled down, hauled up rudely
atop the highest scarlet tulip crown
working curved hookbills furiously
a squawking majestic Jade, unyielding frown
into the trodden blossom glaring ominously

sighing loss of dreams, settling dormancy
drawing from a full headed cluster
holds a feebly trilling aural litany
lovebirds, gesticulating in full fluster
lashes fully opened by sounds heavenly
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Copyright ©Seema Jayaraman, Mumbai 5Nov2015 All Rights Reserved

Topic(s) of this poem: dawn

Form: Free Verse

Comments about Dawn's Aural Litany by Seema Jayaraman

  • Bri Edwards (11/15/2015 9:19:00 PM)

    littany should be litany, but who's counttting? ! hee-hee ha ha

    prise open a lash disobedient, flagrantly
    popping one pupil, unfocussed gape.........i think pries, as in does pry............ and........unfocused.

    BUT i am very pleased you write in English, since otherwise i would not get to read some of your poems! ! !
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    and when i Googled 'define noisely' i found that MY spelling is not perfect. of course i knew THAT already! (see below)

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    madly arbitrating chores domestically ............sounds like this household! :)

    lashes as they rolled down, hauled rudely................this line baffles me. Perhaps adding “up” after “hauled” would help? …..for me it would! ! !

    “holds a feebly trilling aural litany” …………… HERE YOU did USE JUST ONE “t”. ……… :)

    This shall go “as is”*** into my/our November “a showcase for PH poets”, Section B.

    ***[except that I shall correct the misspelling in the title to match the spelling near the end of the poem]

    thanks. bri :)
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    Seema Jayaraman (11/16/2015 7:00:00 AM)

    Thanks Bri, firstly let me thank you for the time you have spent on this poem, and thank you for pointing out the mis-spells, am correcting them straight away in the poem.. I am overwhelmed by your energy and the length of review.. whew.. and thrilled beyond words, you are adding this one to your Nov 15 showcase.. wow! !

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  • Kumarmani Mahakul (11/7/2015 5:26:00 AM)

    This wonderful sharing holds a feebly trilling aural litany that has very amazingly entered in mind of expression. Wonderful poem on dawn shared in marvelous way.10 (Report) Reply

    Seema Jayaraman (11/7/2015 8:57:00 AM)

    Thank you, this was a different take on ruckus created by birds at dawn break.

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Poem Submitted: Thursday, November 5, 2015

Poem Edited: Monday, November 16, 2015

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