when sometimes, i feel cold and blue I would lock myself, in a tiny cramped clue
I usually tell myself,
why me,
and the answer comes, i was her to live and to be
people love just to be, loved
thats true, because I'm one of them
This is a very nice poem, but it needs a little adjusment.. and I hope you wont mind my little remarks and suggestions. 1. Your words are so powerful but I think they need to be in order so try to re-arange them into the (Shape of a Poem) . 2. Always check your spelling and try to avoid typo (keyboard) mistakes.. Beside the rules of the upper and lower-case (Capital and small letters) . Grammer might not be important as long as your words would still make sense. So your poem can look like this: Dont Ever Quit Sometimes, When I feel cold and blue, I would lock myself, In a tiny cramped clue Usually, I ask myself, Why? I'm here to live, And not to die People love to be loved, That is true, Because I'm one of them This is just my opinion, and I hope you accept it. Good luck!
This poem has not been translated into any other language yet.
I would like to translate this poem
Mitwaly's comments are good. Take them to heart and they will help you. You have talent and passion For that I give you a 10