Alfredo Jacques

Echoes

I have heard
backhanded compliments,
lubricated words,
empty promises.
Politics.
Liquid crack
In every corner store.
It gets weirder,
our government
plotriffic thriller
heavy on the story line.
Nations’ history,
strings of violence.
Ancestors.
Mocking my dreams
shedding tears
of joy, unlikely.
Within my dreams,
as one,
we mourn together
for that day,
our way of life
taken.

Poem Submitted: Friday, November 10, 2006
Poem Edited: Wednesday, November 10, 2010

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  • Winsy Ng (8/22/2007 4:11:00 PM)

    yes, very powerful. i have been trying to write like that - short, succinct, and strong. i wish i could do that one day.

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  • Austen Bradford (8/8/2007 10:44:00 PM)

    Strong, clear words I like this write.

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  • Alicia Patti (2/24/2007 12:26:00 PM)

    I like your lubricated words, a lot. And your lubricated words. Good imagery here.

    Then you go to 'liquid crack' Since your first line begins with 'heard', perhaps your second image should begin with 'I have seen.'

    This is a terrific write and I enjoyed reading it, very imaginative and powerful.

    alicia

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  • John Tiong ChunghooJohn Tiong Chunghoo (2/20/2007 9:10:00 AM)

    sensitively written. more to explore here alfredo.

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  • David Harris (2/1/2007 3:55:00 PM)

    Alfredo, I understand exactly where you are coming from. A strong poem. I liked it. Keep writing my friend.
    David

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  • Frank James Ryan Jr...fjrFrank James Ryan Jr...fjr (1/12/2007 12:53:00 AM)

    Alfredo>>>Solid Work here...poignant statement....striking written elocution...
    Crisp, tight, fluxive verse construction...Job well done, Sir...
    ~ F. j. R. ~

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  • Kihindei Adai (11/30/2006 9:23:00 PM)

    I can definitely feel you from that side......preach on.

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