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Finders Keepers

Rating: 4.8

Finding something new
isn't always true
the one that hold
your heart instore
you was brought
in their misery
no pity
figure thee
now you are sore
from so much pain

nothing to gain
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Catrina Heart 07 April 2009

This was a beautiful piece of work, with fine internal rhymes and rhythm, your vertical approach is quite effective. Nice thoughts and image to share forth....

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Scott Daniels 07 April 2009

I like the ideas your getting across but I have a few suggestions. First of all your confining yourself with too much rhyming and the metre of your poem was a bit short. I also had trouble reading some parts of your poem. Your heart instore, you was brought. Might i suggest using a different word such as were. Otherwise good work and keep it up. I really liked some of the images put in there :)

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Miriam Maia Padua 07 April 2009

very meaningful.. deep thoughts provoking oh..life.... 10+++

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Chitra - 07 April 2009

thought provoking..so much to life and yet at times everything seems to be just a big black hole

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Dr Hitesh Sheth 06 April 2009

Yea sometime life sucks.........and seems devoid of any meaning........good write........

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Deep Mukherjee 04 February 2012

a very good one; there is a good flow and optimistic thinking......a thread of interesting words too! !

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May Namoc 09 April 2009

nice piece. keep writing!

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Marilyn Lott 09 April 2009

Very informative poem, LaRon. Keep writing and sharing. Best Wishes, Marilyn

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Ency Bearis 09 April 2009

nice write...a thoughts to ponder...

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Naidz Ladia 07 April 2009

very nice..i like the line''think twice'..a very nice piece.. naizz

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