The world is same as you see
But you are not free
You have to create
And recreate
The position is not easy
It may keep you busy
Through out the life
To walk on sharp edge of knife
Sex is just medium
That human being wants as minimum
It is like hunger
Do not invite anger
Shape your own destiny
No where you find an almighty
It is within you
Feel free and experience through
It is not exploitation
It is bond and relation
Nobody can lie in isolation
You will feel suffocation
Evaluate your link
Do not falsely sink
If you divine feeling and wish
Stay aloof, work for cause and finish the journey
great word usage, poor sentence structure Dan Swab6 minutes ago once again, you use amazing vocabulary and words that create imagery. however, you have poor sentence structure. lines like 'to walk on sharp edge of knife' sounds like somebody who doesn't speak english is saying this. im not sure if this was done intentional, to fit the flow of the poem, but it takes away from your message. inspirational message though. well done Comment 1 Comment+1 Hasmukh MehtaLess than a minute ago sharp edge of knife is reality of life dear.. it is always beautiful combination Comment +1
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I would like to translate this poem
The world is same as you see But you are not free You have to create