For Get Me Not Poem by Amy Louise Kerswell

I like the play on words with the thought of losing the memory of someone and them wanting to be remembered with a death suicide note. But if converted into a poem you would think that you would play with the form because some is dieing or about to die and their thought pattern is not in the right order. Something to think about. The rest of the poem needs some minor line breaks with commas or paragraph break. I think the tone is lost at the end but could be redone to your satisfaction.