Forever, Long Ago Poem by gershon hepner

Forever, Long Ago

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FOREVER, LONG AGO

Each wishing for the sword that severs all,
their love a Gordian knot that they must sever,
the lovers now no longer could recall
the time they said: “I will love you forever.”
Although these words like effigies had cracked,
they felt impelled to take a step to show
that there remained no traces of the pact
implied by their “forever, ” long ago.

Inspired by a poem by George Meredith:

Modern Love

By this he knew she wept with waking eyes:
That, at his hand's light quiver by her head,
The strange low sobs that shook their common bed
Were called into her with a sharp surprise,
And strangely mute, like little gasping snakes,
Dreadfully venomous to him. She lay
Stone-still, and the long darkness flowed away
With muffled pulses. Then, as midnight makes
Her giant heart of Memory and Tears
Drink the pale drug of silence, and so beat
Sleep's heavy measure, they from head to feet
Were moveless, looking through their dead black years,
By vain regret scrawled over the blank wall.
Like sculptured effigies they might be seen
Upon their marriage-tomb, the sword between;
Each wishing for the sword that severs all.

7/13/08

COMMENTS OF THE POEM
Raynette Eitel 13 July 2008

Is there another word than 'severs' which you could use in the first and last lines? The second 'sever' comes so soon as a rhyme and I think it is too many severs. I like the second part better than the first but as a whole these are both fine. Raynette

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